Sword of Steel

I wrote this last night for a class project. I like it, but it seems like it needs some...oomph. Little more detail...

I am a sword of steel ringing right and true,

I wonder what life has in store,

I hear the pain crashing through you like the merciless waves on the shore,

I see anger’s rugged path winding its way through you,

I want to feel your love, not your blood,

I am a sword of steel ringing right and true,

I pretend to be the air in your lungs, giving you life,

I feel like every day is a never ending battle,

I touch the warmth of my worry that is my guide back to the light,

I worry I won’t be able to again climb back in the saddle,

I cry from the nightmares of everything I hate turning into you,

I am a sword of steel ringing right and ringing true,

I understand I’ve got to be strong,

I say whatever is troubling my battle weary mind,

I dream of the day we vanquish from the world all that is wrong,

I try to inspire the troops of the light with my every written line,

I hope my message will finally get through,

I am a sword of steel ringing right and true